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Yes, I did it. I wrote a fic. I. Wrote. A. Fic.
Jesus, I'm scared. I never thought it could be possible, and in fact I think it sucks, but I need to share it. My sweet sisters from OzBrasil had decided all of us should try writing, that's why I wrote it. It should have only 100 words, but of course I lost it somewhere and it's 357 words. As we've been spending so much time discussing about a missing scene involving Almighty Keller and Jason Cramer I thought it'd be easy to write about them. It wasn't. Well, I'll stop now, you can read it by yourselves. Ah, you don't have to comment if you don't want.


Title: Watching
Author: Adriana B.
Rated: PG-13 for language
Posted: OzBrasil
Archived: not yet
Feedback: here or privately (kellergirlbr@yahoo.com.br)
Notes: it’s my first time, people. It was based upon many messages on my Oz Brazilian group about how sexy and hot Jason Cramer and Almighty Keller are. Pos-"Unnatural disasters" and pre-"Secret Identities". Tell me if it sucks, but please be gentle... ;o)





He’s hot. He’s sooooooo hot. I’ve been watching him for weeks now. The way he walks, the way he lifts weights, the way he wrestles, the way he carries his tray at cafeteria... there’s grace on his movements. I think it’s what amazes me most. But of course there’s that gorgeous body, I know some guys who would kill to have a body like that. The sweat covering it when he’s at gym... hummm, that’s a very nice view. It slides over that weird tattoo and I feel cramps on my fingers each time it happens, because I’d love to slide them over it too. And those eyes... yeah, the bluest ones I’ve already seen. Same eyes seem to be glued on that damn ex-prag.
I know he’s absolutely aware of my scrutiny. I’m not the only one doing that, there are many inmates here, fag or not, who’d love to fuck him senseless. Or just be fucked by him. Obviously it amuses him, the guy must love all that attention. Anyway he seems to be obsessed by that cute attorney, crazy ex-prag. Who am I to condemn him? I can see why, little blonde is very fuckable. Somebody who survived the fucking Nazi special treatment must be a remarkable guy. But dude, *he* is the one who makes me hard. If I didn’t have my Anthony I’d make a move. Hum, maybe I’ll do it anyway. I just have to beat that Muslim guy, and then fight the retard brother of O’Reilly. Then I’ll be the winner and ask McManus to find me a place at his beloved Em City. There... well, I don’t think he’ll be obsessed for the rest of his life. *Nobody* can be so obsessed like that, specially when rumors say his obsession subject must be involved in that shanking episode at storage room. I just need a chance to involve him in a good hands on situation. And so that ex-prag will be ancient history and I’ll have plenty of time to slide my fingers over his tat. Until that I’ll keep watching him and fighting my way to his pod.

~~~THE END~~~~

Comments

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alinewrites
May. 18th, 2004 07:14 am (UTC)
IT IS JUST GREAT! I love it, well written, and very original. Go on!
adrianabr
May. 18th, 2004 06:50 pm (UTC)
Aline, it was hard, and I still think there should be another end for it. I'm not sure, maybe I should rewrite it someday, but on last days I was feeling exhausted just by reading it. Anyway it was just a first attempt in writing, so I'm happy with it! *g*
alinewrites
May. 18th, 2004 06:52 pm (UTC)
The first step is the hardest one! I'm sure you'll write many more!
I'm very happy that the Oz fandom has new writers. Will Lucinda write too? And the others?
adrianabr
May. 18th, 2004 07:01 pm (UTC)
I think she'll write someday. We're (on OzBrasil) trying that round robin thing, each of us will try to write at least a "chapter" of a story. It's a funny exercise, and I'm supposed to write next one, after Toby's wet dream with Keller. I'm so grateful because I won't have to write a sex scene right now, I don't feel it in me yet! *g*
dustandroses
May. 18th, 2004 08:13 am (UTC)
Good job!!!
Good job. I love Jason Cramer...I'm glad to see a fic from his perspective! You are going to continue writing, aren't you? I hope so.

Dusty
adrianabr
May. 18th, 2004 06:53 pm (UTC)
Re: Good job!!!
Dusty, it was easy to me to write from Cramer POV since there's not so many fics about him. In fact I don't remember any of them. And it wasn't easy, but I think it could be harder if I'd decided to write from Beecher or Keller POV. There are so many amazing fics written from their perspectives, I'm not sure if I could write well that way. But I'm glad you liked it, and I'll try to keep writing.
verbalthing
May. 18th, 2004 08:52 am (UTC)
Love it! I really love it! Ahhh, that fic was kinda hot, too. Jesus, its too early to be thinking about Keller, I just woke up! But thaaank you for posting this! Great job *thumbs up*!
adrianabr
May. 18th, 2004 06:57 pm (UTC)
Thanks, Kajsa! But it's never too early to think about our favorite con artist!!! LOL
Did you think it was hot? Hum, it wasn't my intention, although it's a good idea. I just tried to see Keller from anybody else eyes, a kind of voyeur - because that's what I am! *g*
And I wasn't sure about writing for a main character perspective, that's why I decided for Jason Cramer. I always liked his plotline, and the guy's hot too, so it sounded like a good idea. Anyway thanks for liking it!
debaser28
May. 18th, 2004 04:34 pm (UTC)
I see a lot of smut in your future! Congratulations on your first fic, Adriana! I think that it'S the first story with Cramer that I've ever read. It was a good start, keep writing, girl!:)
adrianabr
May. 18th, 2004 06:47 pm (UTC)
Ana, thanks! A lot of smut in my future? LOL
Right now I don't think I'll be comfortable writing porn, but who knows about tomorrow? *g*
One of the reasons why I decided to write Cramer POV is that he's not so popular. It'd be hard to write from Toby or Chris POV, they're so well written in so many fics, I wasn't sure if I'd write them well too. Maybe my next fic will be about Lopresti and Mineo fucking at Death Row, what do you think about it? LOL
debaser28
May. 18th, 2004 08:52 pm (UTC)
Argghh! Do you want to blind me, or something?;)
tobyfan
May. 19th, 2004 01:51 pm (UTC)
Very good stuff, Adriana. And it totally sounds like Kramer. It really does. Great job!
adrianabr
May. 22nd, 2004 05:07 am (UTC)
Thanks, Anne. I thought it'd be "easier" to write from a not so popular character POV - I mean, one of those guys who were inmates but weren't so well known. It wasn't so easy, but I liked this experience. Maybe I'll write again soon!
lisacali
Aug. 10th, 2004 05:39 am (UTC)
Hi Adriana!

I just read this for the first time! Wonderful first effort! I too have spent much time considering that missing Cramer/Keller scene - I would die to see it! I like this ending, how his boxing is a way for him to get to Keller - nice idea!

I also read your other fic, 'Tasting'. Very nice. When I realized the person Toby was watching with Chris was Cramer, well, I had to go back and read it again...lol! I liked how you described all the different reactions Toby got from Chris. And the realization that Chris knew Toby was there, and was enjoying his suffering...so very Chris.

It's always so nice to have new writers in the fandom, hope to see much more of your fic.


adrianabr
Aug. 10th, 2004 05:55 pm (UTC)
Hi Lisa! Thanks for your words, it's good to see this ficlet is still working to people. I always thought Jason Cramer was such a good character, with a well written plot, and it was a pity he wasn't in more episodes. Then somebody talked about a missing scene involving him and Keller, when they talked at gym and Cramer tried to involve him... I couldn't stop thinking of it, those guys are hot! :o)
So I decided to give it a try. It was hard, I wasn't too happy with that, but I'll keep trying, probably the more I write, the better my writing will be. I think "Tasting" was a little better, and you know what? I've already Keller POV of same story, as soon as my wonderful betas tell me their opinions I'll post it. Of course I'll have to find a title for that too... "Tasting #2" isn't an option, LOL
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